Ronny Valtonen
Completed 4/11/2026, Reviewed 4/11/2026
2 stars
This was a tough book to review. I know the author and this is his first work. I like to give new, self-published authors the benefit of the doubt. Unfortunately, this book is much like my own early attempts at writing, which I can look at with a more critical all these years later. Valtonen chose a form that is difficult to be anything but exposition. It’s the journal of the commanding officer of a mission to find a new habitable planet for humankind. A lot happens on the trip, but there are no real details. As one would expect in a journal, it’s just the highlights. I never felt much empathy with the characters. Instead, it just felt like a manifesto for an idealistic search for a new home rather than a work of fiction.
The crew consists of four members: Jonathan the commander, Jebidiah the security officer, Ellie the scientist, and Polly the photographer and documenter. They are on a five-year mission to Proxima Centauri B, the most likely candidate for a new home. On the planet they find ruins that contain a portal. They opt to go through the portal and meet a race of beings that are far more advanced than humans. They offer the crew the opportunity to travel farther in their search for the best planet to homestead. This takes them up to a place known as the Void, where physics fails and new insights into the universe and its inhabitants are revealed.
These journal entries were all about telling, not showing. They were all recaps of what had happened aboard the ship. There is almost no dialogue, no details of the characters’ interactions. The entries are pretty strictly reports, not recounts. It made for tiresome reading. Jonathan praised the characters almost completely throughout. There was almost no conflict. The closest we get is that Jeb and Polly try to have a secret relationship which everyone figures out, and then Polly gets pregnant. Even when the crew meets the extraterrestrials, everything goes super smoothly. The crew does have differing opinions on things but always comes to a level-headed consensus.
I also noticed issues a proofreader could have caught. For example, some measurements are given in metric, others in imperial units. I was also confused by the speed of light usage. They were supposedly traveling at 5c, which would be five times the speed of light. With Proxima Centauri B being about five light-years away, it should only have taken them about a year. Valtonen throws in some calculations that are little suspect as well. I didn’t do the math myself, but it seemed like there was some confusion of kilometers/hour versus miles/hour and the value of c as well, either 3 x 108 m/s versus 186,000 mi/s. Finally, there’s the matter of time dilation. Valtonen says that it was disproven in 2019. However, I remember reports that experiments have proven relativity several times since the seventies. Without time dilation or delay, they are able to communicate instantaneously with Earth most of their trip, like with an ansible. But, I guess use of an ansible implies faster-than-light communication, which implies general relativity is still in effect, which contradicts the 2019 assertion.
I think Valtonen could also have used a good editor to help flesh out the characters, adding more humanity, checking for continuity, and flagging hyperbole. Once the crew make it to the Void, you get the sense that all they do is gaze in awe at their surroundings. There are no descriptions of what they saw. Then, Ellie does lots of interacting with the extraterrestrials and analysis of data input from their surroundings. Polly takes a lot of pictures. Jeb watches for everyone’s safety.
When the crew finds the perfect habitable planet, it seems that there are already settlers for the planet. So either I missed the description of the ship as carrying a chunk of humanity, or they arrived very soon after. There’s a second wave of settlers as well, but the journal entries only cover about nine months. So one would have to assume that the extraterrestrials taught us an even faster form of travel.
My last big criticism is the handling of Polly’s pregnancy. There’s no mention of any of the common issues she should be experiencing, like morning sickness, mood swings, swollen feet, and frequent urination. In fact, we don’t hear about it again until the baby’s birth. Then, there’s no mention of Polly being okay when the birth takes place. She’s not mentioned again until two entries later, and then it’s about her work on the mission.
I give this book two stars out of five. I try to go easy on new authors, but this was the best I could do. What I can say is that Valtonen has a marvelous vision for and faith in the goodness of humankind. This could have been a terrific novel with more writing experience, beta readers, and a good editor. I realize these are luxuries for the beginner indie writer. But I believe he would find a lot of value and grow as a writer with this outside input. I have his second novella, the sequel to this one. I’m still going to read it because I believe indie authors have something to say, even if it’s rough at first.















